Sta.sh
My friend, just
finished her game
she is disappointed
with the ending
and
I think she is angry
she wants to take a piss
but there is someone in the bathroom
so she decides to go out
to
piss in the yard
her own little
silent
protest
although she slammed the door
she has never pissed
in the yard before
and I wonder if she will do it
on the bush
or
in the rose bed
if she'll center her act
have everyone see her
let go
or get at it
against the wall of our building, for
she knows
she is its superior
maybe she will do it against the wind
let the drops hit her skin
where she feel
they belong at these moments
I decide I will not watch her
step away from the window
let the mystery remain
and leave her to her sorrow
I bow my head,
I have pretty feet
where other people pisses, it
isn't my concern
although
I'd rather they didn't
piss
on my roses.
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I would like to comment on
the deep
meaning behind the pacing/breaks/phrasing you put into the poem. I thought a lot was said with simply meaningful carriage returns.
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She has <- I get a sense of commitment - there will be no stopping it (much like trying to stop, well...)
never pissed in the yard before <- that hint of disbelief.
and <- carries the thought
I wonder if she will do it <- doing something is in character, but this specifically is a surprise.
on the bush <- now I get a renewed sense of confidence and defiance and....
or <- implied choice through
in the rose bed. <- unyielding determination
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Maybe I am "wrong" but that was what made this so artistic. Music may be defined as "sound and silence, organized by time." This is like that to me: "words and space organized by meaning."
I am not an "into poetry" sort of person, but this was a great read.
There are plenty of things that I take for granted yet are missed by many.